Kkachii wrote:With all due respect, I found this comparison to Stephanie Meyer unfair, seeing as first person POV and double lives was not her invention, but two common writing staples.
Yeah...I have an AP Biology packet that I'm supposed to be finishing, however I really don't feel like it. It's all simple material anyway. >_>;;
Oh, what a lovely and creative story you have there! ^_^ I enjoyed the characters very much and the idea of Fighters battling it out in an arena. One thing that bothers me though is the fact that it reminds me very much of Stephenie Meyer's Twilight series. The way it's written in first person and the fact that they're living double lives...oh, and the romance in it of course. But this is definitely quite a piece of work for 4 hours and is definitely a consideration for a manga! (The romance will be toned down to a brother/sister love. It's become a little too Shoujo at the end. ^_^;Other than that, good job!
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