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Cute stuff, Gothic Lolita Girl!

I wanted to leave a critique about the last image (the girl with the amp & guitar) :


HEAD

I like the way you did the hair, falling slightly, to the side -- gives a subtle sense of movement to this otherwise still pose.

Also, I think the eyes are nicely done (although one eyebrow is significantly thicker than the other... somebody get this chick some tweezers, stat! hehe!)

Her expression is very vacant... what is she thinking, what is she feeling? She seems rather emotionless, as if someone took her batteries out. Maybe play a bit with her eyebrows, or give her a little hint of a grin, to better suggest her mood/thoughts/feelings to the viewers.


CLOTHING

I like the bodice (top part) of her dress; it's an interesting design that adds a hint of unique interest to the clothing. The pleats are pretty well done drawn, too, although it might be nice to add another sliver of a pleat to the right side, towards the back, to give more of a feeling of "roundness" to the garment, as it drapes around her body.


FEET

The shoes... one looks like a ballerine without a heel, and the other looks like a stilleto without a heel. Were you intending them to be platforms?

If the foot on the right is meant to be "on tip toe" then there needs to be a hint of a bend, across the top, where the toes meet the foot.

The shoes conclude in a sharp, straight line, rather than a curve, which seems strange to me. Look at your own shoe, and notice how the back part of the shoe is rounded, not a sharp, straight edge. From the faint eared lines, I can see that you had them rounded, and then changed them to hard lines... curious.

Also, I suggest adding a hint of a heel onto the shoes; even if they are ballerines (flats) they would have some kind of a heel (even a very small one.)


ARM & HAND

Ok, this is something that screams out from the page at me... the hand is disjointed from the arm. Follow the line of her arm... if her hand were attached, it would be inside the amp, rather than holding it.

From what I see, there are two ways you can solve this conundrum:

One : Put her hand under the amp, supporting it, rather than gripping it by the side. However, you would have to redraw the amp, making it higher, because otherwise, her forearm would be outrageously long!

Two : redraw the arm, so that it comes out slightly, less compressed against the body. You would be able to see part of the wrist, where the hand meets the arm. This, I think, is the easier of the solutions, as you wouldn't hav eto redraw the amp at all.


THE AMP

There seems to be some slight perspective gremlins at work here, but, generally, they don't distract me. In fact, I really like the way you drew the strap across the top (even if it's a bit off-center.) I think the handle, and the little blocks where the it connects to the amp's top, is done very nicely, and looks very natural.


Well, there's my 2-cents (well, maybe a little more!) (^_^)
p.s. I like the colours you chose. That blue is very pretty.