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Hello, For I am Millennium Kid, and shal make my debut by giving you a helpfull critique... lol. somthing like that. Anyway, Not bad, Not bad mi amigo, but we are all human, and thus are prone to make mistakes... Well, except for me, im an android. Ahahahahaha, anyway.

Here Is What I Would Like To Point Out / Advise on:

1. Eye Flaw: Im really not good at explaining how to fix this without a hand-drawn diagram, and I may get to making one for you at some point. The eyes on your character are off. Dont worry, this is probably one of the most common beginner level mistakes people make... at least, as far as im concerned. To alleviate this problem, I suggest you try to make your eyes more realistic, and show connection between the top and bottom eyelid... Now, what i mean by that is really, too hard to explain with words so i'l stop now, i suggest that you practice your eyes though. They aren't bad, dont get me wrong, its just a common non chronic error. Also, I would work on keeping the pupils and such smooth with a nice oval, it seems to me like they arent quite circular enough, but hey maybe im just being overly critical, i do have a tenancy to do so.

2. The jaw is off. All I can say here, is that the jaw is not symmetrical, and since it appears that this picture is not meant to be perceived at an angle, this jaw wouldn't do. I suggest that you make the jawline to the right side of her nose identical to the jawline on the left side, and perhaps lift the chin up oh so slightly.

3. the neck is too small, thats to say, it needs to be a bit wider; Think of it this way... If this were a real person, that would definitely be too small of a neck to be considered healthy, so try and alleviate that problem, i dont see how i can give any specific direction, its fairly easy though, you can get it.

4. The eyebrows need to be given substance.... ER... well, thats to say, eyebrows arent exactally lines. It seems to me like they need to be thicker. Looking at any manga example should give you a good reference, yu-yu-hakusho's eyebrows are good, id take a look at those if i were you.

5. The hair is sort of non-realistic. You did a fairly good job on the hair in comparison to examples that i have seen in the past, however, your hair looks too rigid, it doesnt seem to have much allong the way of strands and the like. My advice is to, try for realism... AKA, for lack of a better way of putting it, if you can draw hair semi-realistically or realistically, then drawing hair for the effect you are trying to achieve, which seems to me to be karen from code geass, (lol, i could be wrong, just seems to resemble her) or goku hair, the like, will be much easier, and you will be able to do it more effectively.

Nice work bro, keep practicing.